Editing for Comma Splices and Run-On Sentences

(Corrections)

Sentence 1 --

1.)  Most United States citizens rarely worry about such government intrusion.  A very real threat to privacy does exist.

2.)  Most United States citizens rarely worry about such government intrusion; a very real threat to privacy does exist.

3.)  Most United States citizens rarely worry about such government intrusion; however, a very real threat to privacy does exist.

4.)  Most United States citizens rarely worry about such government intrusion, but a very real threat to privacy does exist.

4.)  Most United States citizens rarely worry about such government intrusion, yet a very real threat to privacy does exist.

5.)  While most United States citizens rarely worry about such government intrusion, a very real threat to privacy does exist.

Sentence 2 --

1.)  Certainly the FBI and state or local police organizations collect information on certain citizens.  The DMI has information on thousands.

2.)  Certainly the FBI and state or local police organizations collect information on certain citizens; the DMI has information on thousands.

3.)  Certainly the FBI and state or local police organizations collect information on certain citizens; furthermore, the DMI has information on thousands.

4.)  Certainly the FBI and state or local police organizations collect information on certain citizens, and the DMI has information on thousands.

5.)  Certainly the FBI and state or local police organizations collect information on certain citizens while the DMI has information on thousands.

Sentence 3 --

1.)  The DMI, or Direct Marketing Information, sells mailing lists to businesses that use the mails to contact potential customers.  Many of these businesses can also get information on individuals' buying habits, their family size, their income and savings records, and many other areas that most of us consider quite private.

2.)  The DMI, or Direct Marketing Information, sells mailing lists to businesses that use the mails to contact potential customers; many of these businesses can also get information on individuals' buying habits, their family size, their income and savings records, and many other areas that most of us consider quite private.

3.)  The DMI, or Direct Marketing Information, sells mailing lists to businesses that use the mails to contact potential customers; therefore, many of these businesses can also get information on individuals' buying habits, their family size, their income and savings records, and many other areas that most of us consider quite private.

4.)  The DMI, or Direct Marketing Information, sells mailing lists to businesses that use the mails to contact potential customers, and many of these businesses can also get information on individuals' buying habits, their family size, their income and savings records, and many other areas that most of us consider quite private.

4.)  The DMI, or Direct Marketing Information, sells mailing lists to businesses that use the mails to contact potential customers, so many of these businesses can also get information on individuals' buying habits, their family size, their income and savings records, and many other areas that most of us consider quite private.

5.)  Because the DMI, or Direct Marketing Information, sells mailing lists to businesses that use the mails to contact potential customers, many of these businesses can also get information on individuals' buying habits, their family size, their income and savings records, and many other areas that most of us consider quite private.

Sentence 4 --

1.)  This invasion of privacy is a result primarily of the technology boom.  The existence of cordless phones, the sophistication of computers, and the emergence of "voice-mail" systems on telephone networks all contribute to the problem.

2.)  This invasion of privacy is a result primarily of the technology boom; the existence of cordless phones, the sophistication of computers, and the emergence of "voice-mail" systems on telephone networks all contribute to the problem.

3.)  This invasion of privacy is a result primarily of the technology boom; therefore, the existence of cordless phones, the sophistication of computers, and the emergence of "voice-mail" systems on telephone networks all contribute to the problem.

4.)  This invasion of privacy is a result primarily of the technology boom, and the existence of cordless phones, the sophistication of computers, and the emergence of "voice-mail" systems on telephone networks all contribute to the problem.

4.)  This invasion of privacy is a result primarily of the technology boom, so the existence of cordless phones, the sophistication of computers, and the emergence of "voice-mail" systems on telephone networks all contribute to the problem.

6.)  This invasion of privacy is a result primarily of the technology boom: the existence of cordless phones, the sophistication of computers, and the emergence of "voice-mail" systems on telephone networks all contribute to the problem.

Sentence 5 --

1.)  It's not that the government regularly sells information on private citizens.  It's that the government does little to prevent others from doing so.

2.)  It's not that the government regularly sells information on private citizens; it's that the government does little to prevent others from doing so.

3.)  It's not that the government regularly sells information on private citizens; however, the government does little to prevent others from doing so.

4.)  It's not that the government regularly sells information on private citizens, but it's that the government does little to prevent others from doing so.

4.)  It's not that the government regularly sells information on private citizens, yet the government does little to prevent others from doing so.

5.)  It's not that the government regularly sells information on private citizens, although the government does little to prevent others from doing so.

Sentence 6 --

1.)  Regulations on business steadily declined throughout the nineteen eighties.  Now it seems to be open season on citizens' private lives.

2.)  Regulations on business steadily declined throughout the nineteen eighties; now it seems to be open season on citizens' private lives.

3.)  Regulations on business steadily declined throughout the nineteen eighties; therefore, now it seems to be open season on citizens' private lives.

4.)  Regulations on business steadily declined throughout the nineteen eighties, and now it seems to be open season on citizens' private lives.

4.)  Regulations on business steadily declined throughout the nineteen eighties, so now it seems to be open season on citizens' private lives.

5.)  Since regulations on business steadily declined throughout the nineteen eighties, now it seems to be open season on citizens' private lives.